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What I See In Poker
What I See In Poker
Women and men can praise their set or pair While playing in his or her underwear. Those family pots amongst learned misfits; The whole world sitting across from where I sit. You can get hit with the deck and drawing dead, Then get sucked out by the big blind in the red. Sklanmuthian filleted mathematics; Poker brats with their third grade theatrics. Not flushing can really stink And occurs more than we think. Buttons and chips and five limpers and stakes; Reading tells and checks and rivers and rakes. Flopping a rainbow may make one charged and gay. Dropping not two/three or dos/tres, but deuce/trey. 2+2 can equal positive EV, While most will imitate WPT. Teenage trust fund kids blowing dad’s dough online; Vital old hands going through the perfect line. aura ... there are more on the tip/s of my brain/fingers. This was my first attempt at poker poetry. I couldn't help myself. I hope you enjoy it. |
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Re: What I See In Poker
Good first effort; work on your meter and you'll wind up the poker poet laureate.
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Re: What I See In Poker
Thanks. I vary meter slightly as you can tell. I'm actually surprised you caught it. It's sort of subtle except for the middle. I suppose it's trying to defy the restriction of a rigid structure.
I will try to create one with structurally perfect meter in the future. It is very difficult to make it "work" with meter exactly on time throughout a whole poem. I am glad this forum can teach, inspire, and motivate it's readers/posters to excel away from the tables. [ QUOTE ] ...you'll wind up the poker poet laureate. [/ QUOTE ] This made me blush. Thanks, peth |
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Re: What I See In Poker
enjoyed it very much,and being somewhat uncouth, I thought the not flushing can stink line pretty clever.
Here is one of mine. It's a Haiku. Today I was burned The game demands I breathe fire I mustn't fear heat |
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Re: What I See In Poker
I liked the poem. It defintely reminds me of low stakes online poker. And the ryhming isn't bad. The meter, I didn't even notice.
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Re: What I See In Poker
Thanks, jk. The Haiku is pretty good, and I usually don't enjoy them very much.
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Thanks. I realized today that I didn't mention "the bubble" or "the nuts" (slaps forehead). Damn. Could easily be in the same line. Responses or any questions are welcome. Maybe a line or two of a new poem contributed by others to create a new multiauthored poem? Just an idea. I will write more of my own soon.
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Re: What I See In Poker
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Vital old hands going through the perfect line. [/ QUOTE ] I'm not sure what this meant. Hands like hands or hands like "hands"? Don't know what perfect line means in relation. [ QUOTE ] Women and men can praise their set or pair [/ QUOTE ] Not sure why someone would praise a Pair. But I guess I use to think a pair of 3s was good. [ QUOTE ] Then get sucked out by the big blind in the red. [/ QUOTE ] In the red? [ QUOTE ] Flopping a rainbow may make one charged and gay. [/ QUOTE ] Funny, but doesn't make much sense. Seems like you were trying to fit in a rhyme here. [ QUOTE ] You can get hit with the deck and drawing dead, [/ QUOTE ] Not sure what "hit with the deck means". Is it literal? I don't think so. But can't think of any meanings. --------- Anyways I still liked it. I liked the tone, very whimsical. I think that's becuase of the rhyme and meter. Surprisinly the rhyme didn't bother me. I normally hate rhyming. |
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Re: What I See In Poker
Are you a girl? If so, I looved it so much. If not, it was ok I guess. [img]/images/graemlins/grin.gif[/img]
I think you could get more out of the "flopping a rainbow"-phrase. Editet to remove "haha". I use it too much [img]/images/graemlins/blush.gif[/img] [img]/images/graemlins/smile.gif[/img] (I'll edit to remove some smileys too soon, I use them too much too [img]/images/graemlins/tongue.gif[/img]) |
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Re: What I See In Poker
this isn't SR in disguise is it?
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