Rap/Hip Hop Fans tell me what you think.

[siccjay]

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the beat is not shabby at all, but the vocals are what make it meh.

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Please, be more specific.

[smokingrobot]

there we go, it reminds me of andre 3K circa aquemini in terms of his lyrics, his delivery however is who im trying to pin on him though...

[smokingrobot]

it has potential, but nobody can beat the greatest story rap out there - The Coup - Me and Jesus the Pimp in a '79 Granada

excellent song.

[siccjay]

Come on you dicks. I appreciate OOT's diverse music tastes.

[smokingrobot]

seems like you're stuck with the only losers not out on a saturday night.

[-Skeme-]

Mad aight.

[zokbarjazz]

it would be helpful to hear the chorus...see how the song fits together.

[Jman28]

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i was looking more for comments on the lyrics/delivery/content/ etc etc etc

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I kinda like it. I think he has a good voice/style to him, and I am interested in the story so far. I'd like to hear the rest of the track.

My main problem with it is the rhyming. His rhyme scheme is too simple, only rhyming 1 syllable usually, and sometimes not even that.

Too many 'kind of' rhymes for me, like 'ousted' and 'outlet' , 'into' and 'want to' etc. I think it's totally okay to make 'close' rhymes when they are part of a 3+ syllable rhyme, but not when they are on their own. Does that make sense?

[newhizzle]

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it would be helpful to hear the chorus...see how the song fits together.

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i dont think the hook matters, lyrically its straight, i got boys that could probly eat him, but it aint bad, far superior to most of the [censored] on the radio and MTV

[IggyWH]

From what you got there I don't think it's too bad and has some potential. I enjoy a good story track, but few can do them right anymore.

It's just like reading a book though. If you read the whole thing and it's great but the ending is crap, then the book is going to be crap.

I really have to hear the track in full before I can give it a good critique.