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among what have already been said, theres a comma splice [/ QUOTE ] You can't be 'among' a single thing. |
#32
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I'm helping a friend write a cover letter for a marketing job in the golf industry. It's pretty much all done, but one of her sentences is bad, but I don't know why. [ QUOTE ] I was very excited to hear of xxx's recent opening, and believe it to have a great deal of promise for becoming one of the state's premier courses. [/ QUOTE ] [/ QUOTE ] I believe xxx holds great promise of becoming one of the state's premier courses. or I believe xxx holds great promise of becoming the state's premier course. |
#33
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"If you want the kind of employee that takes abuse I'm your man. You can treat me like dirt and I'll still kiss your butt and call it ice cream."
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#34
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[ QUOTE ] [ QUOTE ] I was very excited to hear of xxx's recent opening. I believe it has the potential to become one of the state's premier courses, and I look forward to the opportunity to help xxx maximize its potential [/ QUOTE ] That's very good now where are the pics of the girl? [/ QUOTE ] Pics from our last golf outing: pics Also, I rehosted the original image. [/ QUOTE ] I NEVER click on these kinds of links. I'm always extremely careful. Except this time. DAMNIT. Question: I clicked out of it really fast, so I didn't get a really close look. Was that tubgirl? Not sure if I've ever actually seen that, so I don't know what it looks like. |
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The sentence does not have a comma splice, since it has an appropriate conjunction. I don't see anything that is technically gramatically incorrect, but it doesn't flow well.
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I little cheerleading for the company is OK in a cover letter as long as it is back up with something that say "why I can help XXX acheive that goal"
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