TC
Enjoyed the latest installment. One minor complaint: You've changed Brandon's role. There was no reason to suspect any of this earlier. We knew that someone in Vegas was concerned about "an elder", but there was no connection to Brandon. It is kinda like we have skipped the chapter in which we first are given reason to be suspicious of Brandon and then learn that he is connected to the conspiracy to snuff elders.
specifically:
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However, Dave has told TC that Brandon and his friends want to kill genies to keep the games soft and keep making money. Indeed, Dave suspects that Brandon has motives other than just being nice.
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We did not know this....
However, your writing style is as enjoyable as ever. Two examples:
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but his main concern was with Bad Jon.
"What's the problem? Other than him having a terribly cliched name and description, of course," asked TC.
"He doesn't seem like he's required in the entire set-up," replied Dave. "I must be missing something very obvious."
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Brilliant!!!!
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Also, 'of' is not a verb."
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I love the subtle humor (though that humor is lost by taking this excerpt out of context). Dave is good at this and it works very well.
Looking forward to seeing TC at the Final Table!
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Good work again, Lori.
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