[Lori]

Hi CardSharpCook,

Thanks as usual for the critique.

There was a small passage at the end of episode V...

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The Genie looked restless.

"I shouldn't have done this. I'm not quite sure I can explain it," he sighed. "Also, that Brandon guy worries me."

"I meant to ask you about him. He seems to have an idea that you exist," said TC.

"There are people around who are not what they seem. They want to get rid of the Genies forever. Thankfully we are rather hard to kill," explained Dave.

"Why would they want to do that?" asked TC, genuinely concerned for his mentor.

"Genies teach good poker to uneducated losers. They would rather we didn't do it."



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Also in Episode III.

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"Don't do it," said Dave, but it was too late. TC had already agreed.

"You will fly out tomorrow at noon." continued Brandon . "Your tickets and bankroll will be waiting at the airport. Now if you'll excuse me, I have to try to win this seat," he concluded, and with that turned around and headed back to the bar.

After a few paces down the street, Brandon turned around and imparted one last piece of advice. "You might want to stop talking to yourself in public," he noted and then headed back to his game.

"Another fine mess," sighed Dave, but he would not go into more detail.



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I'm not claiming people _should_ have worked it out from these two passages, but at least there was a clue or two [img]/images/graemlins/smile.gif[/img]

I am trying my utmost hardest to keep down the continuity errors.
There will be fewer and fewer big ones(I hope) as the series takes better shape. (Although likely more and more small ones as there is more to mess up)

I do confess to having a writing style that "Hits and runs", if a joke is very vague so that only a few people will get it, I tend to leave it that way. Dwelling on it only seems to admit it is a bad joke... and if it's bad, then why dwell on it [img]/images/graemlins/tongue.gif[/img]

Lori