[PoBoy321]

I'm not exactly sure what this writing assignment is for, but I have a few things to say.

While you're painting a very vivid scene of this location, you're telling too much and not showing enough. Instead of
"The trail up to my villa was a stepped, sun-baked, red brick path that sizzled in the afternoon heat," try something like "The bricks underfoot burned as a I walked up the trail to my villa." Just don't use the "It was..." construction so often.

Also, you have a couple of parts that just sound kind of forced and awkward, like "exemplified typical tropical resort architecture." It just sounds too much like you're writing for an architecture textbook (unless of course that's what you're writing, in which case, bravo).