[Mason Malmuth]

Hi Absurdist:

I already gave an example in another post. But if you want another one, look at the paragraph on the bottom of page 84. For starter's the word "I" appears 14 times.

Also, several of the sentences are horribly written. For example, Phil writes (in the middle of the paragraph): "When I check-raise, if they then re-raise me, I can be fairly certain that I'm beat." Now here's my rewrite: "When I check-raise, if reraised, I'm probably beat." Notice that my version eliminates 8 of the 16 words (including one "I".)

I'll let others address additional problems in this paragraph.

best wishes,
Mason