Sweet lord, I just finished a huge project.

[YourFoxyGrandma]

I've been working on an animation for the past 10 weeks and I just finished tonight. Feels great to be done. It can be viewed here. (http://www.rit.edu/~emr3008/onequarter.mov)

To pass, I have to screen my film for the film and animation students and faculty, which happens Monday or Tuesday of next week. I'm a pretty nervous; let me know what you guys think.

[Popinjay]

the ending saved it. otherwise it was just too drawn out with too many pauses.

[Dynasty]

Since you just finished ten weeks of work, I'm going to hold back a bit.

Starting with a positive comment should help. The voice acting seemed very good.

The animation had what I think is a flaw. The characters clothing didn't have any contrast with their skin. It was a bad visual.

Of course, the real problem is the story. I'm not sure what motivated you to make film about a dog watching pornography with an OC cast member. But, don't let that be your motivation for future projects. It was a poor choice, especially for something going to be seen by a school faculty.

And, comedy might not be your area of expertise.

[GoblinMason (Craig)]

I liked it. From the perspective of someone that doesn't know anything about animation, I thought it looked pretty cool.

I also got a couple of chuckles out of the story.

-Craig

[thatpfunk]

I have a weird sense of humor, but I thought it was really funny. Good writing if it was you.

"I jogged here"
"But isn't it like 50 miles? That doesn't even make sense."
" I dunno."

I know nothing about the animation so no comments there. Someone complained about the pauses, I thought they enhanced the chic-funny-weird vibe.

Good stuff, hope your professor has a sense of humor.

[Popinjay]

oh I actually really liked the animation, but I thought Mischa Barton should've been hand drawn too

[The Yugoslavian]

I liked it.

One thing though. The very long pauses and slow moving plot didn't really....add ambiance to it for me...it just made me quite bored.

Still though...I thought a couple parts were pretty funny....just wish there was more action and/or voice acting (b/c that was pretty good actually).

Yugoslav

[YourFoxyGrandma]

Thanks for the feedback so far. As a film/animation kid I'm used to getting flamed on a regular basis, so don't hold back.

I have a pretty offbeat sense of humor which makes my projects very hit or miss--definitely evident in the comments so far.

And as far as my professors, they all go by their first names without exception, if that says anything about them.

[thatpfunk]

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I have a pretty offbeat sense of humor which makes my projects very hit or miss--definitely evident in the comments so far.

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Ya, I figured. After it was quiet for about 8 seconds I just start laughing because its so pointless. Hope it goes well.

[YourFoxyGrandma]

[ QUOTE ]
One thing though. The very long pauses and slow moving plot didn't really....add ambiance to it for me...it just made me quite bored.

Still though...I thought a couple parts were pretty funny....just wish there was more action and/or voice acting (b/c that was pretty good actually).

Yugoslav

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I was worried about this. I like accentuating awkward moments and usually end up overdoing it; probably my biggest leak.

I also actually originally recorded alot more voiceover type stuff but took most of it out in the final edit because I felt like things were becoming too dialogue-driven. Perhaps more of a balance...

Glad you liked it, though.

[Shajen]

This was nice man.

Good work.

The pauses were a little long, but since it was intentional, I was cool with it.

I found it amusing. A dog watching 80s porn and Mischa Barton stops by?

You're weird dude. I like it. /images/graemlins/grin.gif

[IggyWH]

There was only one part I couldn't stand. I don't know animation, but I would seriously consider changing it since it just seemed completely out of place.

The guy is having a flashback telling his buddy what has happened. The dog throws the guy, he hits the ground, gets up and then in the background the flashback is over with the 2 guys talking in present time again. Yet, the animation is still in the flashback on the guy on the ground getting up and walking away.

I was left sitting here at first wondering if there was a mistake... did you forget to put the other guy in? Why isn't the guys lips moving since he's talking. I then realised you were still in the flashback.

It's just my opinion... but I thought that was really a poor choice of staying in the flashback when it's over and the present conversation is going on.

[DeadMoneyOC]

Cool. There needs to be more of a story though. Some very funny parts though. Also, like other said...it was slllooowww.

[purnell]

Good luck. FWIW, I think it's funny. It has that kind of nihilistic feel that you young'uns love so much. The ending...

"Yeah, I'm on it though" /images/graemlins/laugh.gif /images/graemlins/cool.gif

[Turkish]

I liked this a lot, except for the(already mentioned) seemingly unnecessary long pauses. Very funny dialogue, and the running 50 miles conversation should get you atleast a B...Nice work.